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And here we sit
In the same old place.
I just can't stop
Staring at your face.

We're falling apart
Holding each other -
Never let me go,
We'll love one another.

Won't you come
and dance with me awhile?
Only one thing I
Desire - to see your smile.

Smile as we dance,
Laugh away the pain,
Just promise you'll
Dance with me in the rain.

Dance as you laugh
Dance as you cry,
Just dance with me,
As you let out a sigh.

Now dance with me,
Dance away your pain.
Show me your love,
Let's dance in the rain.
Just something I typed up while at work. I kinda like it - actually, I really like it. We'll see what else I can come up with using the idea of dancing in the rain.

I just love the imagery of dancing in the rain with your love. I've been tossing ideas around for a poem themed around dancing, and I've also always liked it when it rained. So the two ideas really clicked, for some reason. I churned this out a bit quicker than I would've liked, and I've tweaked it a bit since posting it (both reasons because I was closing the office when I finished it), but overall I really like the way it came out.

Constructive criticism is appreciated.
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seRa-casSie Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010
WOW! that's really good i love it XD
hehe i love the idea of dancing in the rain its so carefreee and ... nice XD
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AlastorOfAlbion Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
Tres nice
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SephirothThePure Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
Arigatou gozaimasu.

I really like the way this turned out, but I've been thinking of re-working some of the verses.
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Forgottenangel777 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2008
blah blah, I know I've commented on this before, but I absolutely love this piece. :) I just keep reading it every time I check out your page, makes me cry every time. :) Great job, Sephy.
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SephirothThePure Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2008
Aww, thanks. I don't know why it makes you cry, but I'm glad you like it. :D I've been thinking about making a visual poetry version of this, but I don't know exactly how I wanna do it. I'm thinking about it. If I get it done, I might offer it as a print on here. Then maybe you can get a copy and hang it up in your room or something. That'd be cool. :XD:
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Forgottenangel777 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2008
Yay. =D Do it! lol
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SephirothThePure Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2008
I've got a couple different ideas I'm thinking of trying. Though the one I like the most right now might be the hardest (or most expensive) to do.
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Forgottenangel777 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2008
Hrm.. How expensive?
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SephirothThePure Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2008
Depends. The idea was to have someone model the scenes I'm planning out and have real life images. They might have to be photoshopped to look like rain, cause I doubt I can do that myself and have it look realistic. So I'd have to pay for the model(s) and/or the photoshopping. Unless I can work something out with someone here on dA. I could take the pictures myself if the models were in my area, but if it's someone from dA, then I doubt that would be the case.

All depends on what I can arrange. I could look for stock images, but it's highly unlikely I can find stock images that specific...as a set...using the same model(s). Who knows, though? Price could be anywhere from dirt cheap to astronomical. I have no clue. And unless it's dirt cheap, I have no chance of paying it.
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Forgottenangel777 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2008
:(
If I can help in any way, please let me know.
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